Now and Then

My perfect place is my bedroom, as I have become older a lot of different objects have been added to it.

It was a dark gloomy day. I had just came back from nursery, I couldn’t wait to play with my toys. I was so happy to be home, and was filled with excitement. I raced up to my room with the sweet smell from my mum’s sweet potatoes flowing around the house. I was running so fast that I buckled and fell to the floor. I grabbed on to the black banister and picked myself up. I finally got to my room, now I could hear the wind blowing and the trees rustling outside the open window, my room was filled with cold icy air. I didn’t mind because I had so many toys with all different colours on them, blue, green, red, purple, it was like a rainbow I couldn’t feel the cold.

Underneath my bed I found my Thomas the tank engine train set and hidden inside it like a treasure chest there was a small Thomas the tank engine chocolate egg. I used to tell Thomas the tank engine everything as if he was real. We would go on all sorts of missions and quests like the mission where I was getting from one side of my room to the other without falling in the hot melting lava. Up, down, left, right climbing on anything I could, but as I came to the end of my journey the evil Winnie the Poo bear blocked the train track with Lego bricks and socks. This was the only worry I had back then, but I still managed to evade the devilish bear and complete the mission to move onto the next level.

 

Now when I enter my room all I see is gadgets, of all types, shapes, and sizes. That not including the football furniture, trophies and posters, not a single toy in sight. There is no evidence of the days when I had so much fun in my room, but now my room bores me and drains the life out of me, I feel more like a zombie than the hero I used to be. It was a Monday night and I had just got home from school and I could smell the pizza my mum has promised me she would cook. 5 minutes later I has arrived in my bedroom. I swung open my closet door looking for a spot to put my blazer in. I look In and see I still have some of my baby cloths hidden away, like my Batman costume I wore for Halloween when I was 4. It’s a shame now that I have grown up and they have been replaced by dull school uniforms. I don’t think I can ever wear a batman costume again, without the feeling of embarrassment, I could feel the soft stretchy fabric in the palm of my hands, just feeling it reminds me of the amount of fun I had when I was younger, and those were the good old days.

Finally dinner was ready. My taste buds are tingling with excitement because I was so hungry. My heart stopped for a second, just as I was about to take a bite out of the mouth-watering pizza, I dropped bbq sauce dropped on my carpet. I hurried downstairs to get the sponge before it settled, if my mum saw it she would ring my neck! I had quickly cleaned up the stain and stuffed my face, the cheese was running down my mouth like a waterfall.  Later on I found myself back in my room battling through the long, boring, stressful homework until I had enough. Finally, the time I had been waiting for, it was time for me to play some Xbox. The futuristic sound that the Xbox makes when I turn it on gives me a soothing, excited feeling. Once I turn on my Xbox my mind goes blank and I float into my own world of games. When did I get so old? Where did all my toys go? I remember the other day when I picked up my Woody the wood pecker doll. I used to think it as worth the world but now looking at it, it’s worth nothing but a place in the bin. I remember the days when I could come home and just play but now I have to complete all sorts of homework’s and coursework’s. All these years have passed by and I wonder to myself, when did I get this? What used to be here? Even now I still wonder where my toys have vanished to. My bedroom expresses who I am and there is nothing like it.

1 Comment

  1. Repair the minor spelling and punctuation errors (capital letters at the beginning of sentences, the word “I”, on proper nouns)

    Look at the moments where your description lurches from explanation to narrative. I think this might be able to be improved (discuss this with me if you want more detailed feedback on this aspect)

    Current grade: 29/40 – Band 3 – C1

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